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Particularly in erotic stories there is a big risk in braking the ‘show – don’t tell’ rule. Many authors of erotica have the urge to tell what is going on, and that is why many erotic stories read like a report. “He shoved his thick cock in her wet pussy” is a way of telling, that can also be ‘shown’. You know when you are telling, when the structure of your sentences is often the same. It reads a little bit like a four year old who’s telling about his day at school (I went to school, and then we played with blocks, and then we played outside, and in the brake I had a P&J sandwich). Try to describe sex as an experience. What was so good about it (or so bad)? Use synonyms, and metaphors, but don’t overdo it. Stimulate the fantasy. Leave room for interpretation.
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